I’ve already shown you my character designs for the Spaceship Zero comic book.
Now I’m gonna give you s’more: thumbnails and script.
Steve gave us samples of actual comic scripts that he has worked on, including MEK by Warren Ellis. The three he gave us had similarities but the format differed somewhat. Basically, comic scripts are a lot like TV/movie scripts. Mine is very loose because at the moment it’s just written for my own reference – so I know who is saying what and how many balloons it’s going to take up. Skip it if you want. There’s pics below.
SPACESHIP ZERO #1
By Toren Atkinson
CAPTION: Antarctica, 2023
WALTERS: Professor Ashton, Im John Walters.
WALTERS: Uh, I hope the trip wasnt too uncomfortable.
ASHTON: I despise flying. Where is the site?
WALTERS: Its about one mile southwest. We couldnt pitch camp any closer due to
ASHTON: Are we to travel in that thing?
WALTERS: Yes. Weve prepared a room and a meal for y
ASHTON: I would like to go immediately.
IN THE HALFTRACK
WALTERS: I gather from the Commodore that this vessel is tied into your project in a very profound way.
WALTERS: Well youve seen the data weve sent so far. Steveston took a carbon dating reading on the hull but the results were
ASHTON: completely meaningless.
WALTERS: Well the surrounding ice is DEFINITELY thousands of years old. And if the ship isnt SpaceCorp then its a good goddamn replica. Im no ship buff, but from what Im told its a hopper.
ASHTON: The images you sent didnt transfer very well.
WALTERS: I apologize for that. We couldnt get any clear, wide shots due to the weather. We took some this morning but of course thats no
ASHTON: Has anyone been inside?
STEVESTON: Were just clearing the hatch now, Professor Ashton.
WALTERS: This is Heather Steveston, Professor.
STEVESTON: Heres this mornings readings. The tanks are apparently spent. Just residual traces of xenon as you can see.
ASHTON: Is that it?
STEVESTON: Hold on to the rope, Professor. Well have a much better view at the bottom.
ASHTON: Good heavens!
ASHTON: It cant be.
STEVESTON: What is it, Professor?
ASHTON: Those tines . Staggering!
WALTERS: What about the tines?
STEVESTON: Theyre not standard to the Mark V Space Hopper, I know that much.
WORKMAN: Thats got it, Jensen.
ASHTON: Let me through!
WORKMAN: Woah, hold up there, sir. Give the metal a chance to cool.
(Walters produces an open box of ray guns)
WALTERS: The commodore insisted we carry these, Professor.
ASHTON: What on Earth for?
ASHTON: I have never in my life discharged a firearm.
WALTERS: Commodores orders.
ASHTON: SIGH (takes a gun and holster)
This metal is rather deteriorated.
STEVESTON: That coincides with our readings from this ice.
WORKMAN: Okay. Here are some torches.
They move through the hulk by flashlight
STEVESTON: Looks pretty intact to me.
WALTERS: What level is this?
STEVESTON: Reactor is up one more. Readings are normal.
ASHTON: Hmm. I wonder .
WALTERS: Weir, do you have that cable ready?
WALTERS: The T6 has completely lost its charge and the heads are shot. Give me three minutes.
STEVESTON: Wheres Ashton?
Steveston looking for Ashton
ASHTON: Its here. This is it. The entire module. Its staggering. Its completely impossible.
Power comes on revealing the BTL Drive.
ASHTON: Completely impossible.
Ashton and Walters in dim room
WALTERS: Yawn! You want something to eat? Professor? PROF!
ASHTON: No, for heavens sakes, Walter! No!
WALTERS: Walters. John Walters. Well I do. Download is slow going. Ill bring you something back. Give a yell on the blower if you need anything.
Monitor reads: 7 LIFEFORMS IN DECON
ASHTON: Hello, whats this? Walter, look at this. Eh?
Ashton on computer.
DATA FILE CORRUPT. REPAIR / DIAGNOSTIC / EXIT
Ashton watches as decon does its thing
Panel xxx Ashton reacts to deconstituted thing out of frame
Hand reaches for gun
Feel free to comment/proofread! One of the most challenging things for me is arranging the characters and the word balloons so they flow properly, naturally, and clearly. It’s actually pretty difficult to do that and still keep the panel compositions interesting! As you can tell from the text above, when I wrote the script I didn’t really know what panels were going to be on what page, except for page four. Here are the almost completed first two pages.
I think at some point I’ll take some reference photos of poses in winter coats. Any volunteers? Who wants to be in a comic boooook?