More monkeying around. I pretty much finished inking page two, but I am going to go back and fiddle with some things. I screwed up page one in that I added the balloons before I shrunk the art down to comic book size, so the edges of the balloons are too thin.
On this second page I started screwing around with tones, as you can see, but I’m not too sold on the idea. I have my original lineart scanned in so I think I’m going to go back and put in some tones by hand, with crosshatching and whatnot. Hopefully I won’t ruin the art.
Without tones:
With tones:
The perspective on the legs of the ship is disconcerting. The left leg in particular doesn’t look right at all.
But I should have started off praising the majority of the drawings and the story and the layout. Good work.
Actually that ship pose is traced from a computer model so it is spot on.
That might be the case … but it still looks off, so the tracing is incorrect.
I downloaded page two and I know what the problem is. The way you’ve drawn it, it looks like that left leg connects behind the body (the horizon line) of the ship … when in fact it connects right on the horizon …
I’ve made a rough alteration to the drawing and the perspectives all match up now and it looks as it probably does in the computer model.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v299/criteriondvd_lj/NonCriterion/ssz-page2.jpg
Don’t take this as any sort of criticism. It isn’t. It’s just a simple error. We’re all human. I’m certainly not dissing any other aspect of the comic. It’s very excellent and you’re doing a great job on it.
I’ll definitely buy issues of SSZ when it is (hopefully) released.
Sorry man, that’s not right. It may look right to you, but it ain’t.